New song.

[l Endorphin l]

I've really improved my song writing over the past month..
I think in this song it really shows it.
Constructive criticism would be wonderful.

If you just flat out say "This sucks balls, go die." Than I can't really improve on my music that much.


http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/124786


..*Waits for KgZ* -.-'

[Coolboyrulez0]

This sucks balls, go die.

But seriously I think its a beautiful song, great melody and it's relaxing yet not boring.

Rated 5! Rank 4.58/5 now

CBR

May I step this, kind sir?

[l Endorphin l]

Of course.
You can step whatever comes out of my whacked up head.

[Starshot]

Right off the bat, it really seems like the bassline isn't apparent enough, and it seems to blend in with the rest of the drums, mainly the bassdrum, making a really, really moshy effect. I really, really don't like it at all. It makes me feel like my speakers are eating my head.

The composing isn't bad at all. I don't feel like the melody is strong enough to truly stand out from the drum and the background chord line. Yes, I understand it's ambient IDM, but that melody needs to stand out more.

Also, I don't feel like the melody is in place enough to really get jammed into the listeners mind. One of the things about making a good, catchy IDM track is setting up the melody so it will be stuck in the head of the listener for DAYS.

Not a bad track at all. You're getting better, there's no doubt about that.

[jimerax]

I personally want more variety for the melody line, nice song nonetheless.

keep it up.

also, "Musicians' Jungle Gym" forum would be better for this IMO.

[Netjet!]

Jesus, it's like Venetian Snares! I'll look at some of your others if you have any!